This is an image of the Clark County Washington Public Health website https://www.clark.wa.gov/public-health/measles-investigation
Language Acting Badly
Clark County Public Health is urging anyone who has been exposed and believes they have symptoms of measles to call their health care provider prior to visiting the medical office to make a plan that avoids exposing others in the waiting room. People who believe they have symptoms of measles should not go directly to medical offices, urgent care centers or emergency departments (unless experiencing a medical emergency) without calling in advance.
Language diagnosis:
Unnecessarily long, complex sentence with multiply embedded clauses and phrases.
who has been exposed
and believes...
prior to visiting...
to make a plan...
that avoids
Here are the individual statements/propositions of this complex sentence:
1. Clark County is urging you to do x ( something)
2. You are someone who has measles symptoms
3. You are someone that thinks you have been exposed to measles
4. You should call your provider before you go to a provider
5. You could expose other people to measles
6. The people are in the waiting room.
7. The provider will give you a plan to avoid exposing others to the measles
7 statements are way to ( or too) many to be crunched into one sentence if you're writing for clarity and ease of reading.
How About This
If you have symptoms of measles, or if you think you were exposed to measles, call your health provider first. Do not go to the provider until you call because measles can spread from person to person. When you call the provider they will tell you the best way to keep other patients safe in the waiting room.
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